There are eight sentences in all. All of which seem connected except the second sentence which stands out because it mentions Kahlo, and nothing further is written of Kahlo.
- Therefore, the second sentence stands as a distraction and should be removed by Kari.
- This will make the entire excerpt more readable.
Other generic techniques for making sentences more readable are:
- Avoiding run-on sentences: That is, two or more sentences that are separable, joined together without punctuations;
- Avoiding the use of complicated words: The rule here is to use short words as often as is possible.
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